Rewriting a vague email
Hey, can you look at the report when you get a chance? Some numbers seem off. Thanks.
Subject: Q3 sales report: please check 2 figures by Thursday
Hi Sam,
I'm reviewing the Q3 sales report before Friday's meeting, and two figures don't match our tracker:
1. Ontario sales (page 2): $48,200 in the report, $46,900 in the tracker
2. Total returns (page 4): 118 in the report, 131 in the tracker
Could you confirm which numbers are correct by Thursday at noon? I'm happy to go through them on a 10-minute call if that's easier.
Thanks,
Jordan
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